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Bullroarer
25-11-04, 04:00 AM
Title: Unlikely Heroes

I am tinkerer. I am a worker of machine. The gears and the metals are my life. Everyday I would meld and weld with the gadgets that were created from my mind. The alloys and elements were colors from a painters kit to me. My tools were nothing more than a painter's brush. People call me insane, but they don't know what lives in my heart. They don't see how the metals are a part of me. My father wanted me to be miner, a black smith or engineer like he was. My mother wanted me to be gryphon rider like she was. I chose my own path. I could not live my entire life beneath a iron mine and I was afraid of heights. My father had told me to leave our home and marry either a goblin or gnome. Even now I still yearn for my family.

I am Dodrick McCall, a highland dwarf. I have no home, I have no family and I have no friends. I wander around the different cities of the mountain city's of Khaz Modan, but mostly I hang around villages. People find me a highly unusual dwarf since I prefer not to drink beer. They find me odd or strange, and I would like to believe it doesn't affect me, but it does. I feel pain in my soul that most of my kind has rejected me. There are many dwarven mechanics in Khaz Modan, I am rejected because I turned my back upon my father. Elves and humans are not closely knit as dwarves. A dwarf seperated from his family was like an outcaste.

Today I am just happy to be resting in a cabin of a kind dwarven grandmother. Her sons, her daughters, and her grandchildren were all slain by the blasted King Arthas. She let me stay at her home and work upon my machines. In return I collected wild herbs, did her chores and farmed her field for her. She reminded me of my own grandmother at my father's home. I always feel like crying when I think about them. I was very grateful for what she did for me. When no others would take me in, she helped the unwanted stray.

"Aaaaaaahhhhhhhh!!!" I hear a scream come from outside. It was the old granny. I grabbed my gadgets and bolted out of bed. Fear began to pour through me, the same fear I felt during the third great war of Azeroth. I launched my body at full force at one of the windows. The momentum carries me and smash, I go right through the glass. I looked around to see a fire in the distance.

I rush through the dimness of the early morning and to my horror I see the old woman's body splayed out in death. Over her body was a giant demonic creature. It had great bat-like wings and fangs like those of a wolf. Its eyes were bloodred and he wore the armor of the Scourge. I had never in my life seen something so disgusting. I hid behind one of the trees and watched him feeding. I picked my rifle out of my bag gadgets. It was a special type of rifle that was much larger than a normal one. I had put it together with a rocket launcher. There was one over-sized rocket hiding in the barrel of that that large rife. I would only have one shot.

I turned around to see that there were thre other creatures beside the demon. I was so amazed by the demon I never saw the other three. Two were big and looked a bit like humans. They had armor instead of skin. Their bodies were half rotten with maggots crawling all around. I never seen something so horrible in my life. The other was sort of like an elvin woman, but she floated in air. She did not seem to have any legs. I could kill one, but not all. The big demon spoke, "Bah, Dwarves. Such small meals. Ah well there will be plenty of souls in Kalimidor."

"This country has a strong army. We should join the rest of our forces on the elvin continent. Look at us, an army of two hundred, reduced to four. Some Dread Lord you are, Onacles." The floating elf said.

"Kalimidor maybe a wise place to go." The demon ignored her and picked scroll out of his cloak. A blinding flash of light appeared and they were all gone. I knew who slayed the old woman. Onacles was on Kalimidor and there I would go.



Okay what do you guys think of Dodrick. Oh and Alar, I can't wait to see your character and chapter.

Flak
25-11-04, 04:36 AM
We are allowed to post and reply like for a normal story, yes?

I really like his character, and the first two paragraphs explaining about him. He's interesting and I look forward for the next chapter in which he's present! :y-thumbsu

Bullroarer
25-11-04, 07:15 AM
Of fourse people may reply as in a normal story.

Flak
25-11-04, 07:32 AM
Sweetness. Anyhow, looking forward to next chapter.

Bullroarer
25-11-04, 01:38 PM
Well that depends on Alar and I can't wait either. :g grin: :g grin: :g grin: :g grin: :g grin:

Flak
25-11-04, 08:51 PM
He hasn't been on much lately, has he? Tsch...grah, I'm impatient now.

AlarStormBringer
26-11-04, 01:32 PM
Well stop being impatient, I've been gone the past couple days, HOLIDAY WEEKEND and all, and I'm going to be gone for ANOTHER two days, but I can at least read this and get the basic idea of what it is into my head.

- - -

Okay, it's a good start, and I think I've got an idea of what I'm going to do.

AlarStormBringer
29-11-04, 01:40 PM
Chapter Two - Burned On The Whiplash

Damn them undead! Always playing dirty them.. why's it that they has to pick on us little guys? Feastin' on me poor son and mate, even worse, they stole from me! I hates the way they play dirty, but I'll get them back.. A small green figure continued it's way through the forest, held up by the oddest number of contraptions and mystical devices that could conceivably fit on one being, especially one so small.

The clunking slashing sounds continued onwards as it mowed it's way through the dense foliage. Everything ran from the sight and sound of it as the brightly orange haired goblin lifted a glass orb to eye-level. "Hmm big sea come up soon. Need a water craft, but where to find one?.." He quickly began looking around, stopping his contraption with a pull of a string and a push a of a crank. The entire monstrosity pulled inwards and formed into a band of leather with a metal disc on the end. The goblin called it a sunny-dial-timeo-majig, he always liked naming his inventions.

How many times he tapped on logs and listened to grass and acorns he didn't pay attention, but he did now a few things.. drawing out a flat piece of parchment he quickly pulled a brush from one of his various pockets, stroking and painting the parchment to perfection. With a quick prick of his finger a reddish black ooze dripped onto the ink and spread, burning and sparking madly.

The little creature grinned and slapped the parchment hard against a previously felled tree. Lightning sparked over the entire surface and flames swept through the center and over the top, carving it out quickly. The effect was perfect. A number of talismans later, a nearly completed boat placed on a set of logs was being pulled through the forest. "I, Grizknul Blurblesplatch Herides Jormund the Third, will have vengeance on those dead-uns!"

Right over a fifty foot cliff.

A few minutes passed, and a deer calmly walked by, looking over the edge. That is, until a green blurr shot over the cliff in a ball of fire screaming every kind of curse word in every language. A distant splash could be heard as he hit a river heading off to the ocean.

He was off on the right foot for the first step to getting to Kalimdor.. and Onacles would pay for stealing. That is, if Grizknul didn't get himself killed before it happened.

- - -

:y-hot: Yeah. Okay. A goblin and a dwarf. Who'da thought I'd do that eh? So what, I've got a headache, and I DID think a while on this goblin this, just not the whole entire situation in which he'd meat ol' dwarfo.. I EXPECT they'll meet.

YER UP BULLO! -Slaps Bull's hand-

And yes, the chapters will be longer next time, I promise >.<

Bullroarer
29-11-04, 02:49 PM
That was a jawesome chapter, the only thing crazier than dwarves are gnomes and goblins. This going to be a real good story, I really like the image of Grizknul blasting out of the water cursing as he landed in a river. Him Dodrick will be fintastic, I will bring the next chapter tomorrow lad.

AlarStormBringer
29-11-04, 03:54 PM
Roit. Just try and make it long to make up for my shortness. -JOKE!-

Inquisistor7
29-11-04, 04:15 PM
T'was a good chapter, though short. Not much I can complain about, but the story is still young ;)

Flak
29-11-04, 07:09 PM
Yo, Alar, I had a few troubles with your chapter. One- do you spell check? 'Cuz there were a couple spelling mistakes. Two- at the beginning, a hook is nice, but often description of situations are necessary beyond a few fleeting words describing the goblin. I found it extremely hard to understand what was going on. Also, there are some grammatical errors I'd like to point out, as I see them repeatedly in your online speech:

Mainly, mowed it's way. This mistake is easy to make, as for nouns in the genetive case (or possessive as we English speakers call it) have an apostrophe. Its is an exception, the possessive of it is its. The beast's claws, its claws.

vengeance

A...not so choicy word. The thing is, there are all these words- revenge, vengeance, avenge- but they're all different and used as different word forms. To avenge is the verb form to seek vengeance, revenge is the noun form of the ACT of seeking vengeance, and in this case, the proper word to use would be revenge.I will have my revenge. Not I'll have my vengeance. The use of the words is erratic, seemingly, as they are used in seemingly similar situations, and I don't know the exact rules of usage, but I DO know that revenge is the correct word here.


Other than that...well, it was kinda short and lacking in a few aspects I enjoy when reading a story. The character seems cool, but he's rather poorly developed and I can't quite tell. I look forward to more in-depth installments, and agree that the two characters seem to fit perfectly together, if not in character, at least in the fact that dwarves and goblins fit to well together :-)

Warpblade
29-11-04, 07:17 PM
The archetype of the short works perfectly in this paradigm.

(HOLY CRAP, MY ENGLISH TEACHER WOULD BE LAVISHING PRAISE UPON ME)

AlarStormBringer
30-11-04, 12:12 PM
I have problems with making stories go anywhere. I just end up dragging them over and over in the same spot.

Flak
30-11-04, 12:21 PM
Unlike me, who keeps dragging on the life of a story well past its due ... in different places, of course! ^^;

Anyhow, I have faith in you Alar. As long as Bullroarer's there to keep you standing up! :y-idea: :y-mm: :y-sealed: :y-sad:



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The previous was a message that is in NO way sponsored by Flak.

Bullroarer
30-11-04, 04:59 PM
Arriving in Dark Iron harbor, I began my journey. The harbor was filled with seafarers, merchants, businessmen, vendors, and the occasional missionary. I walked down the neatly tiled sidewalks of perfectly carved granite. How unfortunate that such great architecture, be covered in fish guts. The smell was kind of unpleasant, yet very exotic as well. There was elvin tea, and troll spices being taken on the land. Everywhere was a different face with different story. There were many dwarven naval soldiers wearing their sailing uniforms watching over the crowds of non-dwarves around us. There were a couple of humans wandering around, but they were given little attention. There was a group of elves, but they were ignored. Their main concern was one of the fishing nets.

“I say its some sort of deformed green nagan,” said one of the dwarven merchants. He was a great warrior it seemed. He had an axe on his back that was about the as big as a ram’s head. His eyes were fierce with the look of cruelty. His breath stank worse than the fish in the harbor. He was obviously a wild savage. His only clothing was pants and a coat made of bearskin. He also had a pet traveling with him, a giant billygoat. This billygoat was huge, bigger than a wild ram, an elk, but slightly smaller than a horse. This was a freak of a billygoat. It had long horns with a black coat and some white spot around the legs.

“Well I say it’s a midget orc,” said an elderly human woman. Practically everyone was gathered around a small fishing net.

“Well, my brother caught it, so it belongs to me.” The dwarf merchant with the billygoat announced. He moved in on the poor creature. I peered through the crowds to see an angry greenish abomination snarling. He was screaming obscenities, which I could not even comprehend. Its short stature and green skin, immediately told me exactly what the little bugger. He was a goblin. I had heard of these creatures from a few travelers I met, they were a violent, suspicious and psychotic troublemakers.

The giant dwarf took out his mighty axe and with the blunt handle he knocked the poor creature unconscious. CRACK!!!

“Leave the goblin be, if you know what is good for you lad.” I said as I pushed myself through the group of spectators. Many were surprised to see me face down the wild dwarf and his awful breath. They probably thought that I was crazy. The other dwarf had muscles that were twice as big as mine. I was only four feet tall while the other dwarf was almost five. He looked as though he could snap my neck with his bare hands.

“This thing is my property.” He roared without even hesitating. Before I could even reach in bags or pocket, he walloped me in the gullet with his left fist. The very wind was knocked out of me. I never faced an opponent so strong in my entire life. He probably was not even trying to hit me hardest. I crumpled on the ground as he put up his axe. He then grabbed me by the shoulder and tossed me across the street as if I were dirty laundry.

I quickly picked a small ball from my pocket. The other dwarf came charging at me upon the back of his giant of a billygoat. That was a monster of a billygoat and it made my heart skip a beat. I felt as though I were going to be run over and trampled to death. As it came near, I hurled the blue ball and it exploded in the face of both the enemies. The dwarf and goat stood there. Then the big dwarf cracked a smile. Then he began to chuckle a little. That chuckle became a hearty guffaw and later it became a giant uproar. The goat also began laughing as well and fell with its master upon the ground. I rushed by the two and grabbed the unconscious goblin. I had to run before the laughing gas could wear off.

MysticWolf
30-11-04, 05:10 PM
Well BR interesting addition, I see you have taken the initiative in the story and are pushing it a long a bit, prolly due to what Alar said, but anyways, laughing gas doesnt wear off itll you drink some water

AlarStormBringer
30-11-04, 05:32 PM
Good job BR. Too damn good. Now I feel incompetant. Oh well, next chapter or piece or some such up tomorrow.

AlarStormBringer
07-12-04, 01:46 PM
Bullroarer, I don't know if this is working out. You may or may not of noticed, but I have the horrible, horrible condition too.. not, do things.

It is called laziness, and if this doesn't work out, then this shall be my last chapter. I apologize sincerely because I never think ahead or of others, so scorn me if you must, because I whole-heartedly deserve it.

As for tonight, I have to leave for a meeting in about forty-five minutes and from now to then I have dinner to make, homework to do, and art to draw. Suffice to say I won't be able to write anything, but I WILL try and think about a storyline (even though each time the other person types up a chapter it half-way changes it.)

So, in conclusion, just pray I can type a chapter with as much ease and diligence as I made this.

Bullroarer
07-12-04, 03:24 PM
I will await for your chapter in the mean time I have completely finished my tale, Arak Nerub. I don't know whether start a new tale of an ogre going to gnome university in Khaz Modan or if should continue Iron Man of Azeroth which takes place when Marvel Comic's hero Iron Man enters the world of Azeroth