Heroes of the Mainland

[BraveLiver]

Storyline changes wouldn't let me incorporate the Pirates until this thread, so I might as well start it.


Seagulls flew overhead, screeching for whatever scraps of food the could find on the ship. There were always scraps, always little fish or crabs that could be picked off the moldy dock. It hadn't been scrubbed in days.

"You there! This deck is disgusting!" rang a surprisingly calm and smooth voise, but still a man's, "Clean it up, or I'll have you licking it up! And that's after I cut your tongue out!" A small and bony man rushed for a mop, and swiflty cleaned the deck, trembling.

The man's voice was Carder's, an non-enthusiastic young man in his twenties that was captured by the Pirates. He was once a renowned warrior, leading the Silver Armies towards victory. The Pirates realized his skill, and Carder scaled the ranks quickly. He was now a captain, commanding a large ship meant for landing assaults on enemy shoreline camps.

Carder looked off the bow. He could see shoreling, but surely not the camps he was told would be there. He looked off to the sides, and found the long line of ships sailing beside him. "Gunmen (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/human/units/animations/rifleman.gif), Mobile Cannons (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/human/units/animations/mortarteam.gif)!" he called.

A bunch of men appeared from everywhere, some carrying rifles. The others carried cannons in teams of two. "Prepare for battle! The enemy could be hiding." roared Carder. Those were the last words spoken before the bloodshed began...


More to come in the next chapter!

[Aj Windshadow]

Don't sound like much of pirates to me, consult Nio to make them feel more Piratey..
Aargh ye landlubber ye be spoilin' us image i'll feed yer to em sea monsters!

[BraveLiver]

Too cliched. I want something a little less of the normal pirate style.

Point of ponder: Most of the Pirates from my story were captured. It is very rare to find a full-blown pirate.

[BraveLiver]

Can you change the colour of the links? I'd change them if I could. They're in there because I'm planning on making a map based on this story, and I'm showing everyone the models instead of writing a lengthy description.

This isn't fully a Pirate story, it's a continuation of "History of the Mainland" from a more personal view. Since I didn't get the Pirates in before History ended, I thought I'd start off with them.

Don't get upset though, Carder will be the main focus of the story.

BTW-Thanks for the grammatical help, I always get stuck with posessive nouns and crap. :y-thumbsu

[BraveLiver]

Quick test to see if you can change the colour of links (http://www.google.ca). Nope! Guess they have to stay red, sorry.

The Mobile Cannon carriers worked quickly and precisely. They lugged the cannons to the bow, as one man from each team would pull out a small telescope to watch for enemies.

One of the watchers swiftly pushed the telescope back into his pocket, and made a hand signal. Carder blocked his ears. Rumbles and deep booming noises were heard from the bow of all the ships. Many red-painted cylindrical objects flew through the sky.

The beach of the Mainland seemed to rise. All the sand was thrown trough the air. Figures could be seen flying along with the sond, many of them seeming to be missing limbs.

"The damned bastards really were hiding! You have a good eye, me Lord. Would you like another volley?" yelled the lead cannon carrier excitedly.

"No. I think they've seen what we can do... I think that the enemy is smart enough to clear away. I know I wouldn't want to be on that beach when another volley came." Carder's words were full of wisdom, as if a thousand year old prophet spoke from his body.

The ships were almost ready to land on the beach. There, the Pirates would gain a foothold on the Mainland.

Bah! That's all for today. I swear... I kept on forgetting that there was no more dialogue before the attack. I kept on making the cannon man say something.

Anywho, I look like this :g tired: right now, so I'm off to bed.

[BraveLiver]

More story because I have time. Keep in mind I didn't plan this part so it's on the go.

Also, for the people who haven't read History yet, here's a link (http://war3forum.worldofwar.net/showthread.php?t=28118).

The ships neared land. It would not be even fifteen minutes before the ships bows would rise upon the beaches. Carder was staring into the water, his face as puzzled, then panicked.

"I can see the bottom!" he cried. The Crewmen (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/human/units/animations/peasant.gif) sitrred, they were extremely confused.

"You cannot see the bottom," one of them explained, "The island is much too far away. You must be a little sick, me Lord."

"Come see for youself." taunted Carder.

The Crewman had no time to look, for a crunching sound could be heard below, and the ship reared to a quick halt. Even more confusion stirred, but now everyone on the ship shared the same feeling, except Carder.

"Told you." he stated. "Let's move! We are landing on the beach, ships or no ships!" The other ships were stuck just as much as his was.

"My Lord, we cannot land on the beach, we'd drown in the water!" cried a Gunman.

"We're not going in the water." Carder assured the Gunman, "we're going to use the Sky Champions (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/human/units/animations/dragonhawk.gif) beasts to carry everyone over to the beach."

"Very good thinking, me Lord. I will prepare the beasts." The Gunman scampered off to his duties.

Maybe next time I'll actually get them to land.

[FanMan]

Nice, nice, but it's really, really short, and seriously, text descriptions are a must. This is a story, not a summmary of a video game. Please use text descriptions. It's would make everything more enjoyable. The links really throw me off, like, when I'm reading, I get in this mood, no video games, no work, no nothing- just pure reading. And then what's a sky champion? Link? Video game character? *BAM!* outta reading mood. See what I mean?

[Ogrey-Author]

Far too short..u realize a proper chapter is 2 pages in microsoft word? Some errors with , and ; and u should really DESCRIBE. Many parts of the story are complete blanks! The feelings of the captain and crewman are not brought out..this is a poor attempt at writing! Oh and BTW, with your current standard in writing, i really think you shouldn't be writing in more than one story if u've not decided to stop writing ur elaine hunter story thing.