I want to LIVE!

[Bullroarer]

My heart grow again in raging steam
Release me now from beautiful dream
Release me Ysera, I want live my life
Return me now to my child and wife
Return me to where I was born
Return me from the place I was torn
Return me to the jungles and weed
It is my wife that I truly need
I made the deal and I want to go back
You cannot give me what I now lack
You cannot fill my heart as her hand
Hear me now, this is my demand
I will not be trapped in eternal sleep
I have sown, but no longer reap
I want to live in the elvin realm
Release me now from dreamy helm
Better to suffer then live in delusion
Better pain than live an illusion
I want to live once more
Hear my heart, the beating core
I want touch my child's face
I want to be one with my race
I want to live and swing among vine
I want to live and take what is mine
This wonderous joy I wish to deny
Your delicate dream, I shall defy
Hear my heart and my desire
I wish to fall and you are no my sire
I wish to return to material land
Hear me now, this is my command
I wish to live and be free of rest
My physical body I wish to test
I don't care what price I have to pay
To see my beloved for just one day
I do not care I must die
Give me the chance walk beneath the sky
Give me the chance to hold her in my arm
Give me the chance to protect her from harm
I defy you and your mandate of dragon rule
Think you now that I am a fool
Furion had no child to bare
But you do not seem able to care
I want to live and see my own child
Every day I grow restless and wild
Free me now and let me live
There is so much I have left to give
I want to live and see them once more
Return to that from, which I was tore.

[Nio the Namless]

the only sujestion I got is to make your repeated fist lines in the poem follow some kind of pattern. right now it is

2
4
-
-
2
-
3
-
2
-
-
4
-
-
2
-
-
-
-
-
3
-
-
-
-

(and so forth with the - (mean no repeats)
I would make a sort of 2-4 pattern. And perhaps make a set number of ones that don't follow the pattern. But that is just a thing I like to use with my not so rhymy(sp) stuff

(EDIT: I may have incorrectly wrote that down but I think I got it right)

[Aj Windshadow]

Very very touching, I appluad your work Bullroarer!