History of the Mainland

[BraveLiver]

I really haven't posted in this particular forum section before(except for a really crappy story involving a Peon, hopefully everyone forgot), but I am inspired to create my own little Warcraftish world. I base my story off of a custom map I wish to create(would help if I had the game), and I would prefer if noone makes a map from this(if you do, just know it won't be played, because it's dumb).


Alright, I'll do an intro since I'm not sure how to begin it yet.
All races are replaced with another kind of race.

Humans are now Pirates.(I know I could've done better)

Orcs are now the Beast Alliance.

Night Elves are now the Resident Creatures.

Undead(s) are now Demons.


I'll give a little history of each race, too.

Pirates- The standard, law-breaking Humans that come from a hard life at sea. The last of the four armies to set foot on the Mainland, they were quite unprepared for the Mainland's dangers. Pirates are thieves, and therefore they Pillage. They are the most technologically advanced race, running into battle with rifles and cannons.

Beast Alliance- Many of the Mainland's original inhabitants have evolved technologically to carry weapons, instead of teeth and claws. They wield axes, crossbows, and many other brutal instruments to mow down foes that endanger the Mainland. The Beast Alliance was formed when the Demons invaded, taking on a duty to protect the Mainland and it's creatures.

Resident Creatures- Beasts of the Mainland are called the Resident Creatures. They use absolutely no technology, preferring their natural weapons over forged ones. After the formation of the Beast Alliance, in which the Resident Creatures were spposed to be protected by, the Creatures became very insulted that they were deemed to weak to ward off enemies. Grudges escalated, and now there is no good terms between the Beast Alliance and the Resident Creatures.

Demons- The original enemy of the Mainland. They came through a portal and were soon attacked by numerous inhabitants. The Demons prevailed, as their numbers were far greater. The inhabitants fled, and the Demons soon took root within the heart of the Mainland. The Demons are now the dominant power on the Mainland.


Note: The Mainland is a large island, for those who haven't guessed.




Well, that's my post for today. I hope peoploe will actually have some intwerest in my small creation. My first chapter will entail the batle that occured when the Demons first came through the portal.

[BraveLiver]

The drought continued in the Mainland, never showing a sign of letting up. It had been almost three months since the last rainfall. Most of the inhabitants believed that this was a curse of some kind, but it was still no more than a rumour. Many were now too weak to hunt, too weak to procreate, too weak to move. The only creatures that had no problems were the Frog Warriors (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/neutral/creeps/murlock.gif) and Plague Frogs (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/neutral/critters/frog.gif), who lived right beside a seemingly endless sea.

A Centaur (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/neutral/creeps/centuar.gif) grazed through the plains, hoping to find a form of plant that wasn't completely dry. He would have no such luck. The harsh sun beated on his back, until it no longer was felt. The Centaur looked up, only to see a small cloud passing over the spherical inferno above. This was good material for celebration, as clouds were extremely rare at this point. The Centaur looked back at the field, and saw some whirlpool-like object swirling on its side.

He quickly readied his axe, and blew a call that brought many inhabitants to this phenomenon. They all gathered and surrounded the rotating tunnel to nowhere. Some tried to see what was behind it, but couldn't even see the whirlpool at all!

Suddenly, a Squid Demon (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/neutral/creeps/facelessone.gif) popped out. The Centaur went to see what this odd creature was, only to fall limp after having the Squid Demon's spiked club driven into his head. A few more Squid Demons came, and the inhabitants saw a threat so they engaged. The Squid Demons were mowed down with ease. More came through, more than the last time. The inhabitants massacred what came through. More came through, more than the last time. Now, the inhabitants could not kill all the invaders before more came through. It was soon obvious the battle could not be won. They retreated.

The inhabitants ran over the hills, and then were covered by large shadows as the Dragons (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/neutral/creeps/reddragon.gif) flew over them, heading for the whirlpool (now deemed a portal). The Dragons released their infernal rage, quickly changing the battlefield into a blaze. The Demons, who were now sending through Spider Demons (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/neutral/creeps/nurobian.gif) and Death Armors (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/neutral/creeps/revenant.gif), were unable to withstand the Dragons' attack. They were incinerated immediately.

Just as quickly as the Dragons reached the portal, Skeletons with bows, Skeleton Archers (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/neutral/creeps/skeletonarcher.gif), ran through. The Dragons spewed flames at them, but where surprised that the Skeleton Archers lived! They didn't even look phased! The Skeleton Archers released arrows on the Dragons, and the Dragons were immediate in their retreat. They looked for the other inhabitants, but they were long gone.

The Demons had landed, and they were numerous. The Dragons that fell to the arrows were added to the Dark Ranks, now called Skeleton Dragons (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/undead/units/animations/frostwyrm.gif). It would be a long time before the Demons could be challenged.


Well, that's my post for today. Sorry for the delay. The next section will be the formation of the Beast Alliance, and the true beginning of the war against the Demons.

[BraveLiver]

Don't be afraid to porvide any feedback. It's wierd to be writing a story, not knowing if anyone is listening or caring.

[SuRReAL OrC]

I thought you left.

[BraveLiver]

Yes, I thought I did, too. Explain in "Embrace the end".

Any feedback other than the fact I'm back? Am I wasting my time writing this (rhetorical)?

[Rantrali]

I enjoyed reading it. Nice beginning and I would read it if you continued.

Some repitition between phrases, a rare occasion of grammatical errors, but nonetheless, good.

Nice job. Continue if you wish. I will read.

[BraveLiver]

Ty.... I feel fuzzy and warm inside


BTW-Chp. 2 is almost ready. Harder than I thought to make a divided army work as two different races(I plan to make these races in a map)

[BraveLiver]

Chapter 2 has arrived!

Three months have passed since the Demons gained a foothold in the Mainland's interior. The inhabitants' villages would not stand for long against the powerful shock forces that the Demons sent to expand their territory. It would not be long before the inhabitants would be either forced to leave the Mainland or be annihilated. A few small rebel groups would rise to clash against the Dark Ranks, but they usually could not penetrate the first line of soldiers. A stronger force would need to be assembled.

Rumors grew among the inhabitants that a large rebellion was banding, one that would actually become an army. Rumors became news, and news became propaganda, and propaganda brought in new recruits. This rebellion, now an army, had no name, but it had a purpose. It was a band of all the inhabitants with forged weapons, dubbed "superior" weapons. It wasn't even a month before the inhabitants were separated into two groups: the spread out Resident Creatures, and the newly named Beast Alliance.

The Beast Alliance believed it would be an army to protect the more primitive creatures, and that the creatures would stand back in the Alliance's bubble of protection. This was not the case. Civil uproar erupted! The Resident Creatures were insulted that they were deemed to not be powerful enough to ward off the Demons. War became more and more common, as two factions became three. The inhabitants were fighting amongst themselves.

The Resident Creatures would lose most ground-based battles, but would dominate from the air using what Dragons were left. The Beast Alliance's Sky Ogres (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/orc/units/animations/wyvernrider.gif) on their Sky Hawks could not stand up to the blazing spheres emitted from the Dragons. On the ground, the Beast Alliance's Panda Elders (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/neutral/units/animations/pandarenbrewmaster.gif) would smash through The Resident Creature's Rock Monsters (http://www.battle.net/war3/images/neutral/creeps/rockgolem.gif). The Demons became a less and less important force.

Even as enemy camps were looked to, everyone would still look off to the Sea, sensing yet another danger...



Next Chapter will entail the landing of the Pirates, and the monstrous free for all that came after.

Also to look forward to will be the elimination of a race, all coming up next chapter.

[BraveLiver]

Alright! Polls are open for which race is eliminated! Just post the race you want to see gone.

Races:

Pirates(to come): Technologically advanced. Like to steal gold and such.

Beast Alliance: New faction of Mainland inhabitants with forged weapons. Believe that they are superior to the Resident Creatures in every way.

Resident Creatures: Faction of the Mainland involving creatures that use their physical bodies ONLY to crush their foes.

Demons: The Dark Ranks from beyond, this race is constantly in search of life to extinguish.

[Flak]

It's good, solid writing, but it could use a little more...umpf. You know what I'm saying? Something to make it seem more real, or perhaps to make it seem less real in a very real way. Try writing it so that there's less happening in more words, use descriptions in addition to linked pictures (they're a nice touch but they don't make a story), and try using less stark, plain, sentence by sentence descriptions.

Other than those 'flourishes', so to speak, it's a quite good story.

And my vote is demons.

[SuRReAL OrC]

Demons. Can you say 'cliche'?

[BraveLiver]

Thanks for constructive criticism, Flak. I'll take that in consideration with Chp 3. What I'm doing right now is just writing down the main history (hence "History of the Mainland"), but later I'll be writing "Heroes of the Mainland", which will go much futher into detail. It will provide a much more personal view of the important events.


TY for input! So far Demons will be pwnd. But by what?

[Flak]

By the Pirates. Not so cliché.

[BraveLiver]

Alright... After more deliberation, I can't quite eliminate a race next chapter... As much as I want to, things would move much too fast.

Instead, I will still entail the landing of the Pirates, and the conflict that ensued. After that is all said and done, the "Heroes of the Mainland" story will begin, providing the viewpoint of one soldier. This 'sequel' will be much more descriptive and emotional, and motives behind the battles will become much more clear.